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Yesterday,
he called her beautiful.

She wished it had gone like this:
"You're so beautiful, so pure, so angelic.
I love you."

It really went like this:
"Hey, beautiful. Wanna go to the movies?
Call me back."

Why are these two comments so different?
He did call her beautiful, after all.
But not the way she wanted.

She called him beautiful, too,
before this.
She said his face was smooth and his hair was soft.
She said she always wanted to kiss his lips.
She said he was beautiful.

Now, she's not so sure.
Because, after all,
'beautiful' is a subjective term,
and although he may have nice hair and soft lips,
perfect for kissing,
he is no longer beautiful to her.

Because, to him,
she was no more beautiful than
any other girl.

"Beautiful" isn't just a name.
It's a state of complete being.

And he wasn't, but she was.
When he hurt her, she cried
and wished she could find someone else
who was just as beautiful as she was
inside.
Define 'beautiful'.
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XxLonexLovexX Featured By Owner Apr 17, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Dear God this nearly made me cry... Almost wanna scream "Get it away!" But at the same time I think "This is so right, in so many ways..."
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painted-fox Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2011
THIS is beautful
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HeartSweet7 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2010
This poem is honest and real,
and that makes it beautiful.
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W-and-R Featured By Owner Oct 28, 2010
Let's be frank. It is weird and uncomfortable for men to say things like, "You're so beautiful and perfect, blah blah blah". Words are hollow if they are said because they are expected. Something as simpe as, "Hey, beautiful..." is much more characteristic of men. Instictually, they are looking for someone who will not expect long and thought out proclimations of adoration. It shows that there is little possibility of a comfortable and relaxed life. The idea of calling a woman beautiful is not supposed to be extraorinary or well thought out. Trust me, it is much more rewarding to just hear him say, "Hey, beautiful, long time no see." It's a compliment on what they see of you, not what they contemplate.
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Jayd-Vampyre-x Featured By Owner Aug 16, 2010
Brilliant poem....
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CrackersandCheese Featured By Owner Jul 31, 2009  Student Artist
Im gonna be thinking of a good defanition of beautiful all night now and when i come up with something ill let you know but for now "Beauty is in the eye of the beholder"
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Temeraki Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2009  Student General Artist
Uhh... Let's see... Beautiful: an adjective describing something that is aesthetically pleasing. But if you want the philosophers answer to relate it as a feeling, to be beautiful I think is to be in a state of bliss without ignorance, where you can achieve a harmony of loving yourself and others, knowing the world but also loving it all. Kinda hard to do, meh. I liked the poem! =D
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2009
Thanks. Good definition, there.
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Forsight00 Featured By Owner Jun 7, 2009
The indescribable undefinable feeling in the heart when you look at the person you care for most seeing what no one else can.
Its how everyone wants to be seen by everyone when only few can see it
Its when you look at someone and there's a glow surrounding them that only you can see and can never describe.
It's what everyone yearns for, no one can have, and only one can see.
I think that is what it means to me.
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009
I like the 'glow surrounding them that only you can see and can never describe". Good definition.
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Forsight00 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009
haha. thank you Joanna.
how have you been? how is it way up there?
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009
It's been pretty good. We had about a week of intense heat; it almost reached 100, which is crazy high for where I live. Now it's gotten down to a reasonable (for summer) high 70's.

Plus, it's the last two weeks of school. That = projects galore, finals galore, world language oral presentations galore. *sigh* I probably shouldn't even be on here; I need to finish my English project.

How are you doing?
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Forsight00 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009
ouch ha....hahahaha...100..being high..heehee..
i get ya though;)
not much..been insanely bored got out on summer like...2- 2 1/2 weeks ago. going to ohio tomarrow. and i totally know what you mean with projects and finals and junk. and its been way to crazily hot down here.
:hug: i'm sorry you have to do all that.
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2009
Thanks. Jeez; how hot is it down there?
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Forsight00 Featured By Owner Jun 9, 2009
reaaly hot. sometimes over 100.
but don't matter much. i'm in oklahoma now.
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner Jun 10, 2009
Great, you just got the music from 'Oklahoma" in my head. Good job.
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rihspar Featured By Owner May 28, 2009
Beauty is what your heart see and feels, not what your eyes behold. all just because you don't see beauty on someone, you see it in someone, so how could you say someone 'looks' beautiful? you just gotta look in the right place. :aww:
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 30, 2009
Yep. Nice definition. "You just gotta look in the right place."
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rihspar Featured By Owner Jul 4, 2009
thanks!
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VampiresaInShadows Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
Beautiful is a word you can use to get something you want.

It's awsome and so true...
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
Thanks.

And often, calling someone beautiful to get what you want often works.
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requiem677 Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
Beautiful, adj. - having beauty; having qualities that give great pleasure or satisfaction to see, hear, think about, etc.; delighting the senses or mind
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
Nice definition. Did you think of it, or was it from the dictionary?
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requiem677 Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
Courtesy of my close friend dictionary.com
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wyrdaslayer Featured By Owner May 21, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
beautiful is a smile that is truly happy.
that makes they're eyes themselves smile
that makes you see who they are and not what they look like and still love it.
beautiful is being who you are and not caring what others think.

at least thats kind of what i think.. xp
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
That, my friends, was beautiful.

It's true. Beauty is so many things, and yet most of us neglect to acknowledge it.
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wyrdaslayer Featured By Owner May 21, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
:) thanks.
and yes sadly.. it is neglected.
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ShadowoftheVlad Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
Beautiful is a viewpoint, an opinion, and at the same time, it's subconscious. beautiful is when that person makes you want to hold on and never let go. When their smile makes your heart skip a beat.
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
Beautiful is when you don't know why, but you have to smile. Beautiful is when you see what others don't.
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ShadowoftheVlad Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
beautiful is you love them so much it hurts.
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williamdestroya Featured By Owner May 21, 2009   Writer
I think the beginning of this poem but I feel the ending loses it's luster
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
Okay. I'll see if there's anything I can tweak. Do you have any suggestions?
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williamdestroya Featured By Owner May 21, 2009   Writer
I have no idea what to tell other than it starts off good but then it comes off weak at the end. I wouldn't dwell on this work and move on to another one. ALL writers have written weak poems or prose in the beginning of their careers and even later on! Call it practice.

Check out mine when you have time.

Cheers,
~marvin lee
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Midnight3Flame Featured By Owner May 21, 2009  Student Photographer
awww <3
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
Thanks.
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RedEssence66 Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
Ah man, so true. : )
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
Thank you!
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rubiks-cube040 Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
I recently went to a conference with my school, and the speaker gave us some advice:
"If your boyfriend ever calls you beautiful ask him "what precisely do you mean?""
LOL.
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
I went to a conference, and the boyfriend said "I love you". You're supposed to respond "Why?" In the situation the speaker gave us, the boy responded with "Because you're hot. And..um...yeah, you're hot."
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rubiks-cube040 Featured By Owner May 22, 2009
LOL :) it really is subjective.
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 23, 2009
Yeah...sad, huh? If it weren't, wouldn't the world be a better place? If you knew they meant it when they said it?
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wyrdaslayer Featured By Owner May 21, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
would this maybe have been Brad Henning?
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
Is he the one who wrote 'Don't Take Love Lying Down"? If so, then yes. I recognize the name and I do believe that's him.
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wyrdaslayer Featured By Owner May 21, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
yup. :) that's him alright; he was at our school twice and on some school retreats. i thought i reconized the line. lol.
he's very good at what he does.
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
He's coming back to our school in a couple weeks.
One thing I remember is the rose thing. How many girls want a dozen red roses? Two red and one white? A single red rose?
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wyrdaslayer Featured By Owner May 21, 2009  Hobbyist Photographer
oh yeah! the rose thing, i remember that too. :)
o: well have fun. :D
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DespondentDream Featured By Owner May 21, 2009   Writer
Part of me sees this as an overreaction, but another part of me remembers that to an artist, it's the little things that matter and the things that we want to stand out. So, we make them stand out. Great job.
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Captainkoala-7 Featured By Owner May 21, 2009
Thanks.
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silvercherryblossom Featured By Owner May 20, 2009
love the concept, the idea. your very creative and thoughtful! XD
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